Sunday, September 5, 2010

Application Letter Draft 2

Internships at Shell Singapore

The most successful problem solvers look at things differently and see solutions no one else can. Who would have thought to use fish protein to stop gas freezing in subsea pipes? One of our people did. And right now we’re looking for more people who can bring a fresh perspective to the energy challenge. We’ll provide training, support and career choices to develop your potential. We’ll get you working with some of our most accomplished problem solvers. And together we can help build a responsible energy future. Think further.

Shell Internships are a win-win opportunity: you develop your skills and discover what we offer as an employer while we get the chance to see if you’ve got what it takes to be part of Shell.

Shell Eastern Petroleum (Pte) Ltd will be offering assessed internships, which will be conducted from January to June 2011 and July and December 2011 for students with Engineering backgrounds currently in their penultimate year. An internship will give you first-hand experience of Shell as an employer – and exposure to a range of real-life business projects. The projects provide well defined, business relevant and challenging deliverables, allowing students to independently manage their own area of responsibility whilst receiving management support and giving them sufficient exposure to the Shell environment.


My Application Letter


Long Xiaoxing

37 Prince George’s Park

Singapore 118430

H/P: 81877303

1 September 2010

Mr. Tan Been Soon

Human Resource Manager

Shell Singapore

56 Buona Vista Drive

Singapore 546783


Dear Mr. Tan,

Undergraduate Student Internship at Shell Singapore

I am currently a second year Chemical Engineering student at National University of Singapore. I am very interested in the student internship programme at Shell Singapore, a premier energy provision company. The internship programmes was advertised on the school career centre notice board on 26 August 2010.

With more than ten years of rigorous training in sciences and mathematics, I can offer your company a broad skill set with an emphasis on analytical thinking and problem solving. As you will see from the enclosed resume, my active involvement in numerous academic and co-curriculum activities has helped to further sharpen my critical and analytical thinking skills, which, I believe, will be great assets to Shell Singapore.

I understand that one of Shell’s strategic initiatives is to solve the current energy crisis. My interest and understanding of the current energy use can provide valuable insight in pursuing this initiative. Being highly responsible and committed, I am very adaptable to various working environments.

I would welcome the opportunity to meet with you to explore how I may bring added value to Shell’s effort in solving the energy crisis. I am available for interview scheduled at your convenience on any day from 10 September 2010 onwards. Please feel free to contact me at 81877303 should there is anything to clarify. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours sincerely,


Long Xiaoxing

5 comments:

  1. Hi Xiao Xin,

    Your application letter is very well written. Your writing style is clear and concise. If I am the employer, I am eager to know more about you and I would definitely call you up for an interview.

    Great job!!

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  2. Opps, I forgot to mention about the format. AFter your address, you should leave a blank space then follow by the date. After the date, you should leave a blank space before continue with company address. Besides, I remember during the first peer teaching session, Hu Xuan mentioned that we should use colon (:) instead of comma (,) after the salutation. For example, Dear Mr. Tan:

    Hope I'm not wrong about the format. :)

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  3. Hi Xiaoxing,

    Your application letter is well written and convincing. I think you did a great job with putting the company in mind when doing the letter, resulting in a more 'you' against 'i' letter. Just a little of my input here, i think the perhaps you can elaborate a little bit more on the sciences and maths so as to differentiate yourself as a candidate?

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  4. Hi Xiaoxing,

    Your application letter is so convincing that I do not have any suggestion in mind. Well, have you considered to highlight some great achievements in this letter? Maybe that can leave a greater impress to the employer.
    Great job!

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  5. Hey Xiaoxing,

    Your letter is very concise, easy to read and understand. As what the others have mentioned, it is a little too general. Some specific details will be good to distinguish yourself from other candidates.

    Other than that, it is well written.

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